3-4 Part One

After reviewing my essay I think there are alot of details that need to be expanded on as well as some things that can probably be condensed. I also need to work on my MLA format. I am stuck at some parts of my paper in which I seem to ramble a bit. An example is, at the end of my paper when I begin to talk about the mom and child. I don't really relate it to my thesis and it seems to be just put at the end of my paper and then it ends. I also seem to be lacking a conclusion paragraph to summarizes everything I was just talking about.